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Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better caregivers for their young children. Discuss both views.

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People have different prospective that Montessori schools are the best place to keep their toddlers while they are working where as some people have different views that grandparents can take better responsibility as a
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 taker because of the bond they share with the child. On the one hand, some people think that Montessori
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 is the refined form where parents can drop their kids while working because of the educational benefits they provide at the young age in relation to society interaction that how to learn sharing things with others, how to work in groups as a team.
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 Children
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 learn manners and etiquettes at their pre-age
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 as well as they will mould themselves into
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school atmosphere
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the school atmosphere
 at an early age.
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, childcare
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also provide
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also provides
 food facility for the littles so that parents can relax and in relation kids will get fresh food while in
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, it is to be believed that the elders of the family can take much better
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 of the young ones because they share the emotional touch with kids already and they are more comfortable with their grandparents as compared to the new
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 atmosphere. Grandparents can very well teach their grandkids, their own culture, traditions and how to mingle with your elders.
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 even develop a bond with their uncle, aunts which
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 shows them how to stay together in all good and bad times in a joint family. In conclusion, many believed that preschool provides better
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 to young ones and are more beneficial for working parents, whereas according to few, nobody can beat grandparents
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • structured environment
  • professional care
  • developmental stages
  • cognitive development
  • physical development
  • social development
  • social interaction
  • communication skills
  • teamwork
  • community belonging
  • personalized care
  • affectionate care
  • family bonds
  • emotional security
  • transmission
  • family values
  • traditions
  • pedagogical methods
  • child psychology
  • flexibility
  • educational development
  • social skills
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