We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in businesses, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

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Peoples may not

had

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have

emphasized the importance of computers would be so widespread in the near future. Due to, its processing speed and befitting response to anonymous threats. Nowadays,

use

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the use

of computer unit has become more widespread. At

present time

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the present time

, PCs are used in

every thing

all things

everything

ranging from small scale business to large scale or multinational companies.

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, the usage is quite ubiquitous.

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, to record the data of patients in hospital. Since, the technology is getting vitally advanced there will be a number of applications in coming time.

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huge numbers

a huge number

of communicable diseases around the globe. In countries like Japan and Thailand authorities are devising a strategy that to cure individuals with these chronic diseases’ robots will be used.

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, human involvement decreases

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, they will be able to control the spread of virus by adopting

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strategy.

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, machines in accordance with artificial intelligence will create robots that can help or even do household chores or all

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involving social as well as economic factors

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activities that are done by humans. Automated robots will be used in hospitals, malls, cinemas, to serve peoples.

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, Japan will be utilizing self-operated robots as cheerleader and spectators

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volleyball games during

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, there are innumerable disadvantages if mankind will start to rely on computers. Many hackers use hacking

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platforms, including

: trojan horses, phishing, pharming, worms, malware attacks to steal personal or confidential data like password of bank accounts or social accounts.

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, robots will replace humans as workers in upcoming

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will rapidly increase unemployment. To conclude, due to

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the development

technology computers

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technology computer's

application will exponentially increase.

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surge the productivity as an

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performance but

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cyber attacks will

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swell. But drastic measures can be taken to enhance security.

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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in businesses, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

Fully explain your ideas

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Some people believe that children at secondary school should be streamed, i.e. taught in classes according to ability, rather than being taught in mixed-ability classes. Do you think the advantages of streaming children at secondary school outweigh the disadvantages?

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