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The natural resources such as oil, fresh water, and forests are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problems does it cause and how can we solve these problems?

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The depletion of natural resources at an
accelerating
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Accelerating
 speed is a grave danger to a mankind, which leads to many issues.
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, these problems can be resolved by taking preventive measures.
First
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 of all, excessive
use
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 of oil resources in automobiles will produce excessive smoke resulting in air pollution.
Moreover
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, it is a non-renewable resource, so if we will
use
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 up all its reserves,
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 there will be no more of it, which will have
negative impact
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a negative impact
 on
industrial
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industry
 operations.
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, cutting down trees will increase global warming resulting in temperature increase. Addition to that, reducing earth's green cover will cause soil erosion due to which soil's fertility will be lost.
Thirdly
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, using up all the fresh
water
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 sources, human beings will have to buy drinking
water
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, which will be hard for the middle class and poor families because they will not be able to afford it.
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, many people are dying due to lack of drinking
water
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 in Africa
.
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.
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, there are many viable solutions
that
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That
 can be followed to prevent these issues.
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, people should be encouraged to
use
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 public transport by making it more
comfortable
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Comforter
Comfortable
, which will help in reducing vehicles from the roads that consume lots of oil.
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, the government should launch campaigns to educate people about the adverse effects of deforestation and should put efforts to make people grow and protect trees.
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, industries that
use
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 wood in the manufacturing of their products,
instead
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 of cutting down trees, should develop alternative sources.
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, the government campaigns can
also
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 be used for spreading awareness among people about the importance of saving
water
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. It is
also
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 necessary to limit its usage for domestic and industrial purpose which
will
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Will
 force people to
use
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water
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 as per their need. In conclusion,
although
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 high consumption
of
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Of
 the natural resources is impacting the environment and the people's lives, there is still time to prevent it's
influences
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influenced
 by taking remedial steps.

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