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Many high street shops have gone out of business in recent years. Why do you think this has happened? Is it a positive or negative development?

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In recent years, a number of shops located in
high street
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the high street
, have been shut down. While many people think that it brings positive impact on the society, others think
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 trend brings nothing but negative consequences. I agree that the disappearance of these stores may lead to positive effect upon the society, and in
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 essay, I will discuss the reasons of
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 situation. The tendency happens because that customers would rather do online shopping than go to a particular shop. Technology development has changed the way of taking products from
shops
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the shops
to
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at
 home. People enjoy staying at home and using their modern devices like smart phones or laptops, to purchase items without going directly to
outlets
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the outlets
.
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, Vietnamese young people usually buy newest shoes which just have been released,
on
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in
 online shops. It takes less time than queuing up outside stores.
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 movement has created positive changing, but
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 have had adverse impacts on society as a whole. Obviously, the shift to online shopping has helped the customers be easier to choose and buy anything they want, which
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 have allowed both big brands and small and medium enterprises launching a several of promotion campaigns on social platforms
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 as Lazada or Shopee, which are not required too much resources.
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, there are some drawbacks because of
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 direction. According to
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 change, many employees who have been working in the retail sector are able to
lost
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lose
 their job, that has a significant influence of the rising unemployment rate in many countries, especially in developing countries. In conclusion,
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 high street shops has disappeared recently due to the
convenient
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convenience
conveniences
 of online shopping, I believe that its advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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