The qualities a person needs to become truly successful cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
give high
priorirty
status established in order of importance or urgency
priority
for a successful
life
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According to some people the features required for victory
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are
impossible to learn
fom
a giver or sender
from
a college or in an educational institutes
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I completely agree with the notion as
achiving
to gain with effort
achieving
success is a combination of many other elements
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This
essay will elaborate the reasons behind my opinion
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Firstly
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tertiary education mainly focuses on route learning and getting more marks only for a few subjects
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however when
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however, when
a student faces the real world they require many
life
skills that only be learned by themselves according to the situations they encountered
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For
examble
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
examples
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news regarding the suicide attempt of school toppers shock us that they did that for silly reasons
such
as when parents deny to play "PUBG" game or scold
infront
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in front
of others
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This
implies they are mentally weak to adjust with a bad circumstance
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Secondly
, many famous
personlities
the complex of all the attributes--behavioral, temperamental, emotional and mental--that characterize a unique individual
personalities
are not holding many degree certificate to be
wone
used of a single unit or thing; not two or more
one
won
worn
in their profession
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The best example is
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Bill gates
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who was the founder of "Microsoft "
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inspite
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in spite
of not completing his engineering
degree he
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degree, he
found a
start up
the act of setting in operation
startup
and became the millionaire of the whole world with his new and innovative idea.That emphasis the importance of inborn talents and
hardwork
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hard work
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these are derived from one person's mind set not with a university curriculum
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Similarly
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todays educational institutions fail to proclaim the idea that victory is
orginated
after several failures. The best illustration could be Thomas Alwa Edison
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who invented
filamental
a very slender natural or synthetic fiber
filament
bulb after so many years of sweat and toil
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Also
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it's
interseting
arousing or holding the attention
interesting
to note that Edison's class teacher once told that he was the most failure student in the whole class.
Thirdly
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cope up with
bad and stressful situation
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a bad and stressful situation
bad and stressful situations
is a daunting task and everyday people face new problems
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which require problem solving ability and that differ from a problem which we solve on the basis of some mathematical formulas and theories
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And at the end
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it's all about an individuals positive mental outlook that help them to be a winner of their own
life
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Sushanth
Rajputh
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who was a
bollywood
the film industry of India
Bollywood
star and one of the seventh rank holder of All India
entrence
something that provides access (to get in or get out)
entrance
exam
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But he committed suicide because of
continues refusal
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the continuing refusal
continuing refusal
of many producers to star him in his many dream projects
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His degrees and educational training fail to teach him how to be fought
swith
expresses the means used
with
negativity
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To conclude
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schools and colleges fail to impart knowledge regarding how to stand firm in a negative situation and people who have creative ideas could reach the horizon of victory by their efforts and perseverance
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Also
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stress management power cannot teach by a teacher as in
life
each person is faced with distinct problems
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