An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Nowadays, online shopping is becoming more popular among all buyers throughout the world.

Although

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sometimes

this

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type of shopping might be dangerous, I believe it's benefits overweight the drawbacks. On the one

hand

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, it is acceptable that online shopping has some shortcomings.

First

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of all, development of

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a trend goes

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hand

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with an increase in the number of hackers, stealing online shopper's property. People

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who bought things they need

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for

websites, accede to all requirements of service provider and unintentionally can become a victim of thieving on the internet. To be more exact, despite all efforts

done

produced by a manufacturing process

made

to keep online

shopper's

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shoppers'

private data

confidentially

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confidential

, many hackers are developing and using

the newest

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the new

high-

quallity

an essential and distinguishing attribute of something or someone

quality

programs, which are able to get these data easily and

tracklessy

having no tracks

trackless

. So online shopping can be dangerous if

second person pronoun; the person addressed

you

have large sums in your personal account.

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, the money can

also

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be stolen by companies by offering

people

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peoples'

peoples

products, which are poor in quality. In

this

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case, many people get dissatisfied with the real product they received, claiming that the view of

product

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the product

was better on the website where they bought it.

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hand

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, there are more beneficial aspects of online shopping, I believe. Today a lot of people, who are very busy working a lot, highly appreciate the value of online shopping, as

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kind creates

greater level

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a greater level

of convenience and comfort. People can buy from product for everyday use to

apartment

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an apartment

or a car online while they have

coffee break

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a coffee break

coffee breaks

for example

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. In my opinion, nobody wants to pass

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chanse

a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances

chance

change

to save

some time up

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up some time

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, usually online shopping enables consumers to get an access to

some

one or some or every or all without specification

any

rare goods like books, equipment, devices, clothes from designers and especially medicals. In

medical field

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the medical field

, online shopping plays

big role

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a big role

, because it gives an access for some slowly developing countries to buy valuable medicines from leading countries, where medicine is well developed. In conclusion, despite some

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a structure or object that impedes free movement

barriers

berries

barrels

and disadvantages, online shopping is becoming popular among modern society of consumers and

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, I believe, is far

advantageous

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more advantageous

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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Your opinion

It is said that today in some nations people have chosen increasingly to live alone more than the past. I strongly believe that it is a negative development.

Some people think that countries should limit the amount of food that they import and mainly eat products from their own country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

in many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue can be solved?

In many countries, fast food is becoming cheaper and more widely available. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.