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Some cities create new housing for their growing populations by constructing a smaller number of high-rise buildings. Other cities create more of low-rise buildings. Which solution is better, in your opinion?

#cities #populations #buildings #low-rise
Rising
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 population in urban cities leaves
government
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 with no choice but to build more houses to meet
this
 demand.
However
, when it comes to construction, there is more than
one
 way to build new homes. Some cities prefer to construct fewer residential towers,
while
 others build a larger amount of low-rises for their residents. In
this
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 both options will be discussed and a visible solution will be suggested.
One
 advantage of
the
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tall
building
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buildings
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 is that they can accommodate a large number of people
while
 having a small footprint.
This
 type of construction is popular in the central
city
 area where
the
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land is scarce and expensive.
For instance
, in New York
city
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City
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 high-rise
buildings
 have significantly reduced
housing
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the housing
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 problem, by almost 55% in recent years.
As a result
 of
this
 strategy, rents tend to
become
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decrease which has a positive impact
for
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on
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 that particular
city
's economy too.
However
, tall
buildings
 offer little or no privacy
,
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 and attract higher maintenance
cost
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costs
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. Given a chance to voice their opinion, many individuals would like to prefer low-rise
buildings
 to live in or even build their own houses.
This
 option might be more attractive for big families or persons of an older generation
for enjoying
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to enjoy
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 their private space. Accessibility is
also
 a concern for older people as taking the stairs when lifts are out of power.
In addition
,
one
 or two-story houses are much easier to maintain and cheaper as compared to modern towers. The downside of
this
 type of dwellings is that they
occupied
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occupy
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 more space which is certain to
find
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be
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 harder in the
city
 in today's world
due to
 scarcity of land,
while
one
 can find a home near
to
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the
city
 area and
building
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build
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 new homes with space is commonly found near the
city
 area.
This
 increases commute time to work and negatively affects their quality of life. In conclusion, high-rise and low-rise
buildings
 have their unique advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, high towers are more suitable for
young
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the young
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 generation and
it
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they
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 should be built where
young
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the young
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 population is
more
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. Senior citizens should have a supply of lower dwellings available in quieter locations.
Such
flexible
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a flexible
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 approach can be a good way to address the needs of
growing
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the growing
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city
’s population.
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task response
Ensure a clearer and more direct stance on the preferred solution to the issue. Provide a strong and decisive recommendation.
coherence and cohesion
Create a stronger logical structure by clearly outlining the advantages and disadvantages of each solution and providing a more balanced discussion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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