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University should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, if both genders should be given equal opportunity to
study
 any subject at
university
 has been a controversial topic. I feel that both male and female
university
 goers ought to have equal right to
study
 at
university
.
To begin
 with,
university
 education should be based on talent and performance, not based on equal gender opportunity. If female students are good at science, math, language, engineering, management and information technology, they ought to be assured to do these subjects as their opposite gender
do
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does
. Marie Currie and Dr. Jane C.
Wright who
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Wright, who
 made a major contribution to
humans’
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human
 life can be a great example.
Thus despite
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Thus, despite
 a gender, everyone is should be entitled
with
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to
 tertiary education since they may discover their hidden talent and contribute to the world. There must be a higher level of competition during
university years
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the university years
. If students
study
 with the same sex, they might be less encouraged to compete with each other.
Nevertheless
, if they
study
 with their opposite sex, they will have to
study
 harder, carry out more research studies and give up their ill habits in order to compete and do better in exams and show remarkable achievements.
Moreover
, since children
are closer to their mothers and mothers spend their
Suggestion
spend closer to their mothers and mothers, their
spend closer to their mothers and mothers their
are closer to their mothers and mothers spending their
 time bringing up their offsprings, they should have education to assist their children with their studies. In conclusion, students should be accepted to
university
 judged by their skills and abilities rather and to encourage to
study
 harder there should be competition between opposite genders and
finally
 women ought to be as educated as men since women play a major role in upbringing their descendants.
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