Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Most
children
are now living Use synonyms
with
an unhealthy Change preposition
apply
lifestyle
, Use synonyms
however
, not many people may realize Linking Words
this
phenomenon Linking Words
as
a problem. Eating sugary food, fast food and not doing enough physical activities may lead to Correct your spelling
is
unhealthy
Add an article
an unhealthy
lifestyle
. These habits are common to be found on Use synonyms
children
. Use synonyms
Parents
may tell their Use synonyms
children
Use synonyms
of
what is good and what is bad for them, yet Change preposition
apply
children
are likely to Use synonyms
ignore
. Most of the Correct pronoun usage
ignore it
children
Use synonyms
doing
daily activities outside of their houses, Wrong verb form
do
for
Linking Words
instance
going to Add the comma(s)
instance,
school
and playing with friends. Use synonyms
As a consequence
, Linking Words
parents
may not be able to watch over their Use synonyms
children
throughout the day and would not know what they eat or what they do outside. Use synonyms
Parents
often assume their Use synonyms
children
are healthy as long as they do not get sick. Use synonyms
In particular
, Linking Words
this
happens when Linking Words
parents
are not Use synonyms
into
full awareness of their Change preposition
in
children
Use synonyms
due to
their busyness. Linking Words
Children
may not get Use synonyms
full
attention Correct article usage
the full
as
they Correct word choice
apply
supposed
to have, Add a missing verb
are supposed
while
their Linking Words
parents
are away. Use synonyms
Although
in Linking Words
this
case, they usually hire a babysitter to look after their Linking Words
children
, Use synonyms
Linking Words
thus
Rephrase
apply
parents
are considered to be the most responsible party. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, Linking Words
children
spend most of their time at Use synonyms
school
, at Use synonyms
this
moment the Linking Words
responsibility
toward Use synonyms
children
Use synonyms
shift
to teachers. The teacher should be responsible Correct subject-verb agreement
shifts
to teach
and Change preposition
for teaching
oversee
Wrong verb form
overseeing
its
Correct pronoun usage
their
his
her
student
during Fix the agreement mistake
students
school
time. Use synonyms
Therefore
, we could not put the teacher adequately to Linking Words
parents
as it may cause bias inUse synonyms
regards
to Fix the agreement mistake
regard
responsibility
. Use synonyms
In addition
, the Linking Words
school
may add specific Use synonyms
school
Use synonyms
subject
regarding healthy Fix the agreement mistake
subjects
lifestyle
methods in order to Use synonyms
fulfill
their Change the spelling
fulfil
responsibility
in Use synonyms
this
matter. In conclusion, both Linking Words
parents
and schools are responsible Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
for
this
problem, Linking Words
nonetheless
, they must take Linking Words
this
Linking Words
responsibility
cooperatively as it is impossible to solve Use synonyms
this
problem independently. Being responsible for Linking Words
children
is not always easy, Use synonyms
therefore
Linking Words
children
must be given a proper education to prevent them from unhealthy Use synonyms
Use synonyms
lifestyle
.Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
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