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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
Granting
gender
 equality in society should start from higher education is getting highly important to consider today.
However
, while some believe that women should stay underprivileged in admitting to equal subjects like men, I feel that identical numbers of both genders should
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 in universities to hold the important sectors of a country equally. It is thought that to base admission on equal opportunities of each
gender
 in every subject sounds a fanciful idea violating the merit and choice. Here male’s academic performances should be taken into account because they tend to excel more than females in secondary and high schools. Underestimating these education phases, but focusing on only higher education admissions would cause most talented men candidates to deprive from an impractical selection procedure.
For example
, female quotes may not allow those opposite sex good graders to be involved which lead them to be placed on wrong courses. Despite the moral of talent and choice, it would be unfair for girls to be defeated discriminating not to be as potential future high achievers as boys. While the whole world is combatting
gender
 discrimination, it would be wrong to reject women in favour of
more talented
Suggestion
most talented
 men in admissions.
Firstly
, if equal proportions of each
gender
 in each subject are granted, girls will have equal
opportunities overcoming
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opportunities, overcoming
 male dominance in the study, work and society. The drivers of
this
 trend would result in no
gender
 stereotyping in the classrooms in schools which would be a favourable basement for overall equality.
Secondly
, preventing male students to be head of women, the same number of mixed
gender
 personnel would be prepared for the country’s future.
As a result
, female students would not feel disadvantaged not enjoying the same standards and rights of the society which has been a main pattern over the past centuries. In conclusion, receiving identical figures of applications from both genders for a university level in each subject is a good idea and the admission should strictly base on equality rather than talent. I believe thanks to
this
 trend, more females will own essential sectors of the government and be ready to compete with men.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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