Many people are choosing to find information online rather than in books. Is this development positive or negative?

Before digital technologies
such
as electronic tools, social media and mobile phones were invented, there was an only way to study something new,
this
was the books. People used to go to the libraries and find the
book
, which you needed, and
then
gather what they want to know.
However
, nowadays, all the individuals have their own
cellphones
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cell phones
, which include the enormous amount of
information
,
as a result
, we do not have to
search
something from books. In my belief,
this
development has more positive sides than the negative.
Firstly
, using your mobile devices to find something you want to know saves your time. It takes few minutes to find what exactly you are looking for. It has only three moves: take your device, go to the web browser and
search
something you want to find.
On the other hand
, using
book
takes
few hours
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a few hours
to find the exact
information
.
For example
, you should go to the library to find
right
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the right book
book
and
search
it
alphabetically
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alphabetically, then
then
search
again
to
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for
the specific
information
you want to read.
Secondly
, making a printed
book
is very harmful to the environment. We cut more than a hundred
of million trees
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million trees
to make newspaper, books and magazines annually,
for example
.
Moreover
, it influences on the world’s biggest problem, climate change. Because of the fact that trees help stop climate change by removing carbon dioxide from the air, storing carbon in the trees and soil, and releasing oxygen into the atmosphere. Trees provide many benefits to us, but we cut trees to read news.
Also
, we need billions of gallon water to recycle
papers
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paper
or prepare papers, which do not give the eco-friendly effects.
Study
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The study
shows that online reading devices
such
as kindle is more beneficial in
environment
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an environment
the environment
environments
.
Thirdly
, we lost in the countless amount of data and it is possible that to take wrong
information
. Everyone has the
right
to freedom of thought and expression. Based on
this
right
people
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person
express their misconceptions on online and it makes us confuse and lose. When we have more
information
, we have to filter it more.
This
tons of data could help us, only if we use it
right
. In short, online world
give
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gives
us many
opportunity
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opportunities
if we use it in a correct way.
Moreover
, we need to
filter what
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filter, what
are we
read
prepare for eating by applying heat
ready
to save our invaluable time. More importantly, we all live in one world, which means we should love our environments
and try save
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and try to save
our beautiful nature.
Submitted by Enerel Ugtakhbayar on

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