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Juvenile delinquency is on a rise in many parts of the world. What are it’s effects? How could the problem be solved?

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The fact that minor crime is increasing in many countries is a matter of grave concern.
This
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 essay will discuss the major effects of
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 and offer some solutions.
To begin
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 with,
this
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 problem would
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 people socially and individually in many ways. The social effect would be on
tax payers
someone who pays taxes
taxpayers
 as
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the government
 will spend their tax money on prisons.
As a result
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, other development projects would get less investment. Budget for essential services like hospital, fire departments and police departments can be reduced by
government
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 due to
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 prisons.
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, juvenile crime would
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 potential careers of
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 minors. Prison environment and court proceedings put negative impact on juveniles, and they are more likely to derail after any involvement in
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 crimes.
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, there are a variety of possible solutions available to address
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 problem. The most effective would be for
government
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 to chalk out some policies regarding juvenile crimes. The
government
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 should prioritise essential services expenses over other services, and they should eliminate juvenile sentence.
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 of giving them
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a sentence
, the
government
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 should invest money on rehabilitation facilities. Another step can be taken by the
government
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 is to educate children about the consequences of crimes. It can be achieved through television commercials and
children
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children's
 movies, which would help to eradicate
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 crimes in society.
Thus
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, changes in juvenile sentence laws and investment in rehabilitation services would minimize the negative effects of juvenile
deliquency
nonpayment of a debt when due
delinquency
. In conclusion, expenditures on juvenile prisons and spoiled future careers of juvenile delinquents are among its biggest effects. Not until the
government
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 intervenes will the issue be resolved.
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