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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

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Supermarkets sell a wide range of cuisine products in the present day. They have both national and international imported foodstuff, available for all kinds of cultures and cuisine types. I personally believe that it is a blessing to have a variety to choose from
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 of limiting the options to
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-based
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 range. Living in Canada, where multiculturalism is one of the key factors of the economy, options in the
food
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 aisle is essential. There are people, living here from all around the world and they have their own cooking needs.
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, importing
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 products from their own
country
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 to their nearby grocery store, it is a way for them to be connected to their authentic cooking.
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, being an Indian, living in Canada I felt in the beginning, I would have never cooked Indian
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 if there were no spices or goods imported from my own
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. It would have limited people like me to just Canadian based cuisine choices or the snack that are available on national grounds. Another reason for me to favour bringing in outside the
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 goods is that, it gave me a chance, sitting in one
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 to try and taste a variety of cuisines and diverse nation-based
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 items. Before coming to Canada, I had only tasted Indian
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food but
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food, but
 when I came here, I got an opportunity to try other kinds of
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 as well.
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, I have
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 learnt how to cook most of the dishes other than Indian. Not to forget, it was only possible through the imported
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 products available in the market. I can buy Chinese
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 ingredients and cook at home
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 of going out. It made cooking experience, versatile for most of the people. In the nutshell, I would like to mention that it is more of an advantage to have various
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 products imported to own
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 than just domestic
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 because of the above written reasons. It does not limit an individual to a certain kind of source of survival and provides variation for the taste.
Submitted by Supreet Kaur on

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