Society would benefit from a ban on all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that advertising is useless and sometimes harmful, so that the society should ban advertising to receive benefits from
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action. From my point of view, I completely disagree with
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argument because advertising has a vital role to play in our society, and
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it sometimes has negative effects on children, a range of solutions can be done to resolve
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problem. On the one hand, advertising affects positively the economy, the society and our lives. From an economic perspective, advertising enables companies to draw attention from their potential customers in order to raise their revenue and profits from selling their products.
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results in developing other relevant industries
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as manufacturing and logistic services because of an increase in the amount of goods needed to produce and transport. From a social perspective, advertising is
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an enormous industry, which employs many of employees from people who run digital marketing to content writers,
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not only leads to the reduction of unemployment rate but
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helps its staff to have a better quality of life. From an individual perspective, a various range of products with different quality and prices sometimes wastes our time to make our decisions. To tackle
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problem, advertising puts us at an advantage of understanding every aspect of our needed products,
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, a majority of time spent on considering is saved while the most suitable goods is purchased. From all perspectives mentioned above, it is clear that advertising is very beneficial and necessary for any aspects of our lives.
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, there are some problems caused by advertising for children.
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, some advertisers aims their advertisements to children in order to make them put pressure on their parents to buy them toys or games consoles
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, children can become addicted to purchasing their favourite items while they spend less time on studying or developing their useful skills.
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, some advertisements encourage teenagers do dangerous actions or include many violent or pornographic content which are very toxic for young brain development. All those problems occur due to the lack of censorship of official authorities before those advertisements are broadcasted to children. I believe that those negatives of harmful advertisements do not outweigh positives of permitted advertisements and there is a variety of solutions which can resolve those problems from imposing stricter laws on censoring advertisements to punishing illegal advertising networks. In conclusion, I still hold a firm belief that advertising is too vital to ban it when we consider all benefits it does to our lives in many aspects.
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, a lot of action should be done to reduce its negative impact on children.
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  • materialism
  • unnecessary expenditure
  • critical source
  • informed choices
  • misleading
  • exaggerate
  • survival
  • target audience
  • environmental degradation
  • disposal
  • art and expression
  • social and cultural value
  • commercial intent
  • reasoned conclusion
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