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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or bad thing?

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It is
undoubled
render capable or able for some task
enabled
 that people’s appearance is becoming more and more significant than in the past few decades because of the influence
by
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of
 more and more events about beauty
such
 as
fashion show
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fashion shows
a fashion show
 and pageant. The intention of beauty is
also
showing
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shown
 on the clothes that people are wearing. Here are some reasons demonstrated that why people intend to wear fashionable clothes.
First
 of all, wearing new released clothes makes them feel they are not being left behind. They want to be part of
this
 modern society, and they want to have
social connection
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a social connection
 with the fast-changing world.
Fashion
 industry as one of
the fast
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the fastest
-changing
industry which
Accept comma addition
industry, which
 indicates that who follow the
fashion
, who will get the newest trend.
Additionally
, main force media and its advertisements constantly convey the information that people need to buy fashionable clothes to build confidence. They even use famous celebrities to influence people to buy
more newest
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more new
 clothes. Those younger generations with
unmatured
 mindset who has
took
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taken
 the most energy form stars will receive the information and apply the rules to the real life, which lead to an even more wave of chasing
fashion
. In my opinion, over chasing
fashion
 is unreasonable. It will let you lose your identity since you are looking exactly the same with your peers, which is
also
 unhealthy for personal development in foresting
unique
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uniquely
 characteristic.
Furthermore
, spending
on
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of
 more money on buying a lot of new clothes that are not under discount will lead to unbalanced of your allowance which commonly happened to young people. To
concluded
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conclude
, common value
is not only be
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has not only been
 the responsibility of young people’s parents, but
also
 the obligation of
main force
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the main force
. More and more focus on the
fashion
 will lead the society to the unhealthy trending chasing. If more valuable information can be brought through the media, the world will become better.
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