Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or bad thing?

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It is

undoubled

render capable or able for some task

enabled

that people’s appearance is becoming more and more significant than in the past few decades because of the influence

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more and more events about beauty

such

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fashion show

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fashion shows

a fashion show

and pageant. The intention of beauty is

also

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showing

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shown

on the clothes that people are wearing. Here are some reasons demonstrated that why people intend to wear fashionable clothes.

First

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of all, wearing new released clothes makes them feel they are not being left behind. They want to be part of

this

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modern society, and they want to have

social connection

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a social connection

with the fast-changing world.

Fashion

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industry as one of

the fast

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the fastest

-changing

industry which

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industry, which

indicates that who follow the

fashion

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, who will get the newest trend.

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, main force media and its advertisements constantly convey the information that people need to buy fashionable clothes to build confidence. They even use famous celebrities to influence people to buy

more newest

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more new

clothes. Those younger generations with

unmatured

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mindset who has

took

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taken

the most energy form stars will receive the information and apply the rules to the real life, which lead to an even more wave of chasing

fashion

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. In my opinion, over chasing

fashion

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is unreasonable. It will let you lose your identity since you are looking exactly the same with your peers, which is

also

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unhealthy for personal development in foresting

unique

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uniquely

characteristic.

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, spending

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more money on buying a lot of new clothes that are not under discount will lead to unbalanced of your allowance which commonly happened to young people. To

concluded

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conclude

, common value

is not only be

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has not only been

the responsibility of young people’s parents, but

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the obligation of

main force

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the main force

. More and more focus on the

fashion

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will lead the society to the unhealthy trending chasing. If more valuable information can be brought through the media, the world will become better.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

307 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

express individuality
boost confidence
self-esteem
social status
designer labels
cultural icons
art and creativity
financial strain
overspend
fast fashion
culture of waste
economic growth

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