Today’s schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In schools, students are learning to analyse literature, calculating using trigonometry and understanding how

photosyntheseis

synthesis of compounds with the aid of radiant energy (especially in plants)

photosynthesis

works, but often students are inexperienced and helpless after graduation when encountering the real

world

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. It is

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agrued

united by being of the same opinion

agreed

argued

that

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an educational institution

schools

should teach their students how to survive financially in the

world

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topic is difficult though. Many educators

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think

that a school is supposed to teach students in subjects that they will most probably not encounter again post graduation, so that teachers can develop open minded and well informed individuals. At the same time, it can be argued that

shyools

a state of extreme confusion and disorder

chaos

hould

past tense of "will"

would

impart skills that would be

applicable

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applied

in everyday life.

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Mathematics

for example

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, is supposed to not only communicate actual mathematics skill, but

also

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teach logic to

studentgs

a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution

students

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, schools are supposed

to prepared

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to be prepared

the youths for their lives following high school. Currently

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goal is not

full

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fully

met, as often students are unable to handle their

finanxes

assets in the form of money

finances

sensibly

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sensitized

sensible

sensed

sensitive

and

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can often face significant problems. Schools that teach students how to survive financially could change

this

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This

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significant shift in the ideology of education is unlikely to take place soon, as the education

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(photography) the act of assuming a certain position (as for a photograph or portrait)

sitting

Stein

stone

has been in place for too long to be easily changed.

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a change of

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scale would be

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entailing great loss or sacrifice

costly

, as teachers would have to be trained and a syllabus for

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potential subject would have to be created.

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, in some countries,

for example

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Germany, a community subject is

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obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service

available

whih

interrogative pronoun, used both substantively and adjectivally, and in direct and indirect questions, to ask for, or refer to, an individual person or thing among several of a class

which

politics and finances are

discuused

to consider or examine in speech or writing

discussed

disclosed

disguised

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leaves students from Germany in a better situation to deal with

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fiancee's

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with

their lives.

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, in

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growing

world

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with lots of complexities, learning economic and financial aspects of issues can result in improving problem solving abilities which empower people to encounter

difficutlies

an effort that is inconvenient

difficulties

and boost the financial security in their lives. In

other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

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, more advanced the

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becomes, more sophistications people will face. All these complexities have economic aspects and all people need the related knowledge to

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tackle

these kinds of problems and schools are one of the best place to teach them to people specially youngster

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To sum up, there are clear benefits of including techniques and knowledge to face financial issues in the

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curriculum.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

370 words

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Today’s schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, many animal species are becoming extinct. Some people believe that countries and individuals must solve this problem. Others believe that human beings are more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.