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Developments in science and technology have caused environmental problems. Some people think that a simpler way of life will protect the environment, while others believe that science and technology can solve environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Frequently exposed to mountains of information
on
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in
to
 the mass media, the general public
are kept
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is kept
 informed by the latest news report regarding the negative effects of
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 on
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environment
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the environment
. Meanwhile, some people claim that people need to adapt simple lifestyle to solve environmental problems, whereas others hold the opposite viewpoint that
technology
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 could address
environment
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-related issues. In the essay, both arguments will be
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
 before proposing my standpoint. Some people in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of view claim that a simpler way of life will protect the
environment
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.
First
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 and foremost,
an
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a
 dramatic increase in the using of numerous cars can be regarded as one of the chief culprits behind the greenhouse effect and global warming. In comparison with driving cars produce exhaust emissions, green commuting,
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 as walking or biking, could greatly mitigate the severity of environmental problems and strengthen
people’s health conditions
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the people’s health conditions
.
Likewise
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, if people try to reduce their consumption of electricity so that the exploitation of natural resources
such
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 as fossil fuels or nuclear power would be minimized, which undeniably contributes to protecting
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environment
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the environment
.
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, under no circumstances could we ignore the great convenience brought by the
technology
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. To be specific, the developments of
technology
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 allow us to exploit many renewable sources.
This
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 means that modern environmental
technology
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 has enabled us to capture
this
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 naturally occurring energy and convert it into electricity or useful heat through devices
such
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 as solar panels, wind and water turbines, which reflects a highly positive impact of
technology
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 on the
environment
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. Another equally important aspect to be considered is that the improvement of
technology
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 could achieve sustainable development. It can be perfectly illustrated by the example that the invention of the electric vehicles has effectively mitigated the severity of air pollution and greenhouse gases in the atmosphere. What is
also
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 worth noticing is that with the cutting-edge
technology
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 in
regeneration
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regeneration, environment
environment
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, scientists have
revive
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revived
 many habitations for not only humans but
also
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 animals and plants. Weighing both sides, I firmly believe that the latter point carries more weight. Despite the face that it might seem sensible for people who choose a simpler way of life, the development of
technology
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, the innovation of
technology
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 and the application of
technology
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 should be taken into consideration when
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
 the merits brought by the
technology
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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