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The availability of unhealthy food, such as fast food and junk food, has become more widespread in recent years. What are some of the problems associated with this development and what action can be taken to solve them?

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 likes fast
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 or junk
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 are increasingly popular with young people.
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 of choosing fast
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 as a time-saving solution for busy time. In Vietnam, it is considered a culinary trend. In
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 essay, we will talk about the reason why unhealthy
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 development and how to solve
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 problem.
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 fast
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 is gradually becoming a symbol of modern lifestyle, but these foods bring a lot of harm to human strength. Fast
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 contains lots of calories and cholesterol, so it can cause obesity, for those who eat too much.
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, studies show that regular use of fast
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 and carbonated soft drink, soda, etc., is not good for the gun. Fast
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 is high in saturated fat Triglyceride (bad fat) increases blood cholesterol causing atherosclerosis, hypertension and cardiovascular diseases. For these reasons, there should be solutions to limit the amount of unhealthy cuisine intake. If you're not really busy, cook yourself a nutritious meat. To protect your health, limit eating baked or greasy foods.
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, try eating a lot of boiled, steamed dishes. If you find these dishes are too boring, you can refer to the recipes on the internet to enrich the meal. Fruits and vegetables are
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 good for health because they include lots of vitamins, minerals and fibre.
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, eating a lot of these foods can help you prevent heart disease, high blood pressure, some cancers and lose weight. To sump up, avoid eating foods that are harmful to health and should eat foods high in fibre, protein, and vitamins. Let's find more way to make us healthier.
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