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Currently, the whole world is under the grip of pandemic Corona. Some countries have implemented immediate total lockdown while other countries have adopted different means to counter. Should total lockdown be implemented instantly or not ?

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There is no doubt that at present, the entire world is facing the pandemic, caused due
covid
overlaid or spread or topped with or enclosed within something; sometimes used as a combining form
covered
cowhide
 19.
This
 essay will highlight what are the reasons behind
this
situation
 and what are some potential measures to resolve it. There are two main reasons why we are facing
this
situation
.
Firstly
, in many parts of the china alive animals are being cut down for eating
purpose
Suggestion
purposes
, like bats etc.
Such
 animals contain viruses, resulting
into
Suggestion
in
 spread of virus from animals to humans.
Secondly
 WHO is
also
 responsible for
this
 pandemic. After knowing that china was responsible for the spread of
this
 virus, WHO did not take any thorough step to control it on time. These
circumstance
Suggestion
circumstances
 caused a considerable amount of damage to mankind. Some solutions can be adopted to improve the
situation
. One approach is to implement complete
lockdown
 instantly. Implementing
lockdown
 instantly may result into less spread of corona virus,
thus
 provide little bit more time for
government
Suggestion
the government
 to react to the
situation
 in a better
planed
designed or carried out according to a plan
planned
 manner. Another measure is that governments should impose partial
lockdown
.
This
 ensures that only the affected areas are closed, in remaining areas work is carried out with some restriction. In conclusion,
this
 essay highlighted that
main reasons
Suggestion
the main reasons
 behind
this
 happening are China and WHO.
This
 essay
also
 presented that solutions to
this
 issue are twofold, total
lockdown
 or partial
lockdown
. In my view both the methods are right at their place. The
first
 method gives time to react wisely and
second method
Suggestion
second methods
 ensures only
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
 area is sealed, as economy of that country is not
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
.
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