There are social, medical and technical problems associated with the use of phone. What forms do they take? Do you agree the problems of mobile phone outweigh the benefits?

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The mobile phone

A mobile phone

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is one of the greatest inventions that humans have ever made, which has a tremendous influence on many aspects of our lives.

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there are some problems related to

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device, I strongly disagree that the problem of mobile

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outweighs the benefits and the reason will be covered in

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essay. On the one hand, mobile

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can be harmful to peoples’ health (both physical and mental health) when they use it regularly. Sitting in one place and looking at the screen for a long time can cause a numerous diseases

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as backache, headache, short-sighted. It

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had bad impacts on human’s brain and memory.

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the mobile phone

a mobile phone

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can separate people from the world outside and make them less active or addicted to social media and games.

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smartphone sometimes have some technical problems

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as disconnecting to signal, explosion or having an error.

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, despite of

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, there

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a host of significant benefits that mobile

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brings about.

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of all,

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the mobile phone

mobile phone

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has greatly changed the way we communicate. People from all over the world now can communicate easily thanks to mobile

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. People can make a

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call, send and receive messages or face-to-face video chat, which help them keep in touch with their friends and relatives. There are

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a number of social media on mobile

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such

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as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter that assists people not only in contacting with everyone, but

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in updating news.

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, mobile

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also

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a means of entertainment. Because of its portability, people can watch movies, listen to music or play games on their

phone

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for relaxation everywhere and every time. There is

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diverse information on the Internet that people can search for with their cell

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, which helps human accumulate new knowledge.

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, a mobile

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can be used as a camera or a notebook to store data. In conclusion,

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there are some drawbacks, it is clear that the mobile has a number of positive influences on our life.

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, from my perspective, I would agree that the advantages of mobile

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are numerous.

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There are social, medical and technical problems associated with the use of phone. What forms do they take? Do you agree the problems of mobile phone outweigh the benefits?

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ART CLASSES, SUCH AS PAINTING AND DRAWING, ARE AS IMPORTANT TO A CHILD'S DEVELOPMENT AS OTHER SUBJECTS, SO IT SHOULD BE COMPULSORY IN HIGH SCHOOLS. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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It is inevitable that as technology develops, cultures must be lost. Technology and traditions are incompatible- you cannot have both together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Many people today are worried about the large quantities of waste produced by ordinary households. What problems are caused by household waste, and what solutions may be possible in both the short and the long term?

Some people say that history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.