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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #information #research #business #world
Some people think that sharing
knowledge
 is important because every scientific or business progress was built upon sharing and cooperation. If scientist or businessmen didn'
t
 share their
information
, others couldn'
t
 learn from their mistakes and avoid them.
On the other hand
, some believe that sharing valuable and classified info is wrong because
this
information
 bring superiority.
This
 essay will discuss both views. Sharing
information
 is the foundation of cooperation among scientist and businessmen and it would help amateurs to learn and professionals to grow. It would
also
 help the growth and development of science itself and since the main goal for every scientist should be helping other people and promoting the
knowledge
,
Accept space
,
 it should be their priority to share their work.
Conversely
, business is about making a profit, so it's understandable if some people hesitate to share their path to success. So there are two fundamental arguments, one of which prioritize development of sciences and humanity and the other focus on self-promotion and personal benefits. Sharing
information
 will lead to an equal world where
everyone
 has the same opportunity for success while withholding it is the main idea of capitalism, which believes
everyone
 should try to make it on their own. I believe sharing
knowledge
 should have no boundaries and all data should be available for
everyone
 because it would lead to an equal world where people live in harmony. In conclusion, there are two points of view regarding sharing
information
. Some believe
knowledge
 should be accessible for
everyone
 and sharing it shouldn'
t
 have limits and other think that some valuable
information
 shouldn'
t
 be released since it can be profitable. I agree with
first point
Suggestion
the first point
 of view and I think it is much more moral.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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