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Taking a year off between a finishing school and starting university is a waste of student’s time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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More and more
school
 leavers are deciding to take a gap year before continuing their education. While some suggest that
this
 trend is without merit, I believe it benefits students for three reasons.
Firstly
, taking a break from education can allow students to gain valuable work experience in their chosen field, which gives them a real taste of employment. While I accept that students might lose
certain amount
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a certain amount
 of
time
 during the career break, I think it
effects
have an effect upon
affects
 positively because they could work for an organization as a volunteer.
As a result
, they could grasp enough knowledge, skills and conceive real goals of their future study and job. Another key reason is self-development. After finishing
school
 student would have enough
time
 to contemplate about their possible future action or read books. In fact, it is really essential for every individual to pay attention to self- development and personality. So,
time
 between finishing
school
 and starting university is most suitable for that
actions
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action
. The main reason why I believe taking a break between
school
 and university is a good idea is academic burn-out. It means if
student
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a student
the student
 takes a year off before commencing their
further
 study or job, they would have spare
time
 to relax and recharge their
battery
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batteries
 after
hustle
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the hustle
 and bustle of
school
 life. Eventually, it prevents them from an early academic burn-out which makes them redundant to their study or job
otherwise
. In conclusion,
although
 some believe that
this
 lifestyle would be disadvantageous for students, in my ACCEPT COMMA ADDITION
opinion
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Opinion
, it
opinion
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Opinion
 it is far more advantageous for the aforementioned three reasons.
Submitted by Azizbek Khamdamov on

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