Without capital punishment our lives are less secured and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

throughout the history of
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, there
is
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capital
punishment
. and
people
believe that our lives
secure
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and violence
decrease
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with capital
punishment
.
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agree and disagree with
this
statement
due to
following
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reasons. the main reason
i
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disagree is no one has
right
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to take someone's life.
as
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human
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humans
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make the
society
and try to make it safe, it is necessary to have common sense and laws.
however
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these
principals
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should have
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limit
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and
i
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think it should be
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lives. and capital
punishment
is not effective
to reduce
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crime
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rate.
according to
data about
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between
death
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penalty and crime rates,
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death penalty cannot decrease crime rates dramatically. it means that
method
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is too cruel when
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compare it to the result which is
society
's safe.
however
, in some parts,
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also
agree
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the statement. because capital
punishment
has
symbolic
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effect so that
society
can alert
people
about the
consequence
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of their behavior.
people
will look down on the
punishment
which has no death penalty. even though some
people
argue that capital
punishment
is essential to keep
the
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society
safe.
i
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still mainly disagree because of human
right
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and not enough effectiveness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent effect
  • retribution
  • irreversibility
  • judicial error
  • human rights
  • ethical considerations
  • life imprisonment
  • perception of violence
  • rehabilitation
  • reforming
  • contentious
  • societal perception
  • morality
  • recidivism
  • capital punishment
  • justice system
  • incarceration
  • penology
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