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In many countries people are living in a "throwaway society" where things are used for a short time and thrown away. What are the causes of this and what problems does it lead to?

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All of we live in a period that accumulates materials used ephemerally. The human mind wanders
unstablly
lacking stability or fixity or firmness
unstable
 all of his life. He comprehends enough than other mammals to differentiate or contrast between material and immortal
.
Accept space
.
 In
such
 a society,
throwaway
Suggestion
throw away
 substances are used or heavily depended for conducting
benifitted
financial assistance in time of need
benefitted
 tasks.
Firstly
, throwaway materials are
immensly
to an exceedingly great extent or degree
immensely
 produced
by
Suggestion
in
 large or heavier quantities by various industries. The day
is begins
Suggestion
begins
has begun
is beginning
 with touching these substances and ends with
untouching
cause to be attached
attaching
enticing
 them. Without them, life is incomplete. Identically,
relishness
vigorous and enthusiastic enjoyment
relishes
 of dopamine
is
Suggestion
are
high
Suggestion
higher
 with these substances
.
Accept space
.
Although
, there
are
Suggestion
is
 temporary part that plays a significant role, it is abated harshly by
humans
Suggestion
human
human's
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. In the end, there are mortal pieces fragile
into
Suggestion
in
seperate
act as a barrier between; stand between
separate
 layers. The causes lead to pollution.
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