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Taking a year of between finishing a school and starting university is a waste of time student’s time. To what extent do you agree?

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, taking a break from education can allow students to gain valuable work experience in their
choosen
one who is the object of choice; who is given preference
chosen
 field, which gives them a real taste of
employement
the state of being employed or having a job
employment
. People without university diploma are unlikely to find high-powered jobs. To illustrate, students can possibly work in a restaurant as a waiter or waitress for a low wage. If they work hard much but earn
little
Suggestion
less
, they may understand the importance of high schools as a guarantee for the relatively easy life.
As a result
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,
this
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 situation induces the aspiration to study hard among the potential students. Another key reason is self-development. There is no doubt that studying at universities and working after graduation may not permit students to go in for sports due to time constraints.
However
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, if students take a year off to improve their health condition by attending gyms regularly, they will be able to respond any physical hardship.
Therefore
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, the body healthcare comes
first
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 in terms of self-development. The main reason why I believe taking a break between school and university is a good idea is academic burnout. Many students tend to be tired after the primary as well as secondary schools, lasting 9-10 years in most countries. During a long period of education they are usually overwhelmed with the tasks given in
differents
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 lessons. It would
be extra burden
Suggestion
be an extra burden
 for students provided that they did not take a gap year.
Thus
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, academic holidays can prevent them from emotional
exhausition
extreme fatigue
exhaustion
.
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