You want to apply to a private college seeking admission for a bachelor degree. You are experiencing financial problems at the moment and can not get admitted to the college without some help. Write a letter to the Principal of the college explaining your situation and ask for information on scholarships or other means of financial help available.

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Dear Sir /

Madame

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Madam

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, Please be requested. I accomplished

average

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an average

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score of 80% in the 12th standard exam in the specialisation of accountancy and commerce. I am the one merely school topper. Currently, I am seeking

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apply

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admission for

bachelor

Correct article usage

a bachelor

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of commerce at your college for the upcoming academic year of 2020. Unfortunately, My family is facing a financial problem due to the current Covid-19 situation. My Father is a single earning person at a moment. He dreams about me a lot to become a good position in my career. It will not

be happen

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happen

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without your support. Even though, I scored a good mark in all the subjects. I need a fund to pay the college fees without interpretation of my studies. I saw an advertisement on your college notice board

stated

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that stated

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that it welcomes a school topper where they could get a scholarship and other benefits as well. According to

this

Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, I am writing

this

Linking Words

letter to

apply

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forapply

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a scholarship

with

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under

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your supervision. In case, all the seats are fulfilled by the students. Kindly advise the sponsors

those

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apply

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who overcome to support the poor students before now. I will be grateful and delight, if you have given

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me an

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opportunity. I'm anticipating your favourable reply at the earliest.

Karthikaa RamachandranThu Jul 09 2020

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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

208 words

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