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Since Most Information About History And Culture Is Found On The Internet, Museums Are Not Needed Anymore

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It is evident that the culture and
history
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 of a country is important to uphold. Museums are available for visits whenever and wherever.
However
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, with the aid of the
internet
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, ease to access
information
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 online is
prefered
more desirable than another
preferred
 rather than making trips down to the
historial
of or relating to the study of history
historical
historic
 place. I strongly agree that
although
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 the
internet
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 is a platform where
information
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 is readily available, being physically present at the museum feels more
sureal
characterized by fantastic imagery and incongruous juxtapositions
surreal
surely
 and
hence
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, should not be eradicated. One main reason museums
are absoultely need
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absolutely need
are absolutely need
are absolutely needed
 is to provide the atmosphere for
visitors experience
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the visitors' experience
visitors' experience
visitor's experience
.
For example
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, the Singapore Art Museum has many extraordinary paintings hung up for viewers to learn more about the multicultural background behind these portraits. Even so, there are many stories based on Singaporeans ranging from the period where Singapore was founded
to
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in
 the aftermath of World War II. With that, they will be able to better appreciate the historical values as well as
accept
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accepting
 the cultural differences from the diverse social groups.
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, for the public to enjoy, it is vital for museums
to be
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be
being
 present in our midst. Yet, many argue that the
internet
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 can
also
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 provide a page of well-written
information
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.
For instance
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, China has a rich
history
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 of the different dynasties in various parts of the cities. Undoubtedly, in
this
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 fast paced world, travelling overseas comes at a great cost.
Instead
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 of travelling and visiting the museum overseas, modern innovations have solved these issues by creating platforms for users to surf and be well-
equiped
provided or fitted out with what is necessary or useful or appropriate
equipped
 with more
information
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. It is conclusively clear that the
internet
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 has served its purpose
to
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for
 the majority, proving a point that museums may not be needed after all.
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, museums are crucial to draw in revenue for the country. The influx of tourists visiting the country is important to build up the economy. Though many argue that it is secondary, but in Singapore there are many
lazer
an acronym for light amplification by stimulated emission of radiation; an optical device that produces an intense monochromatic beam of coherent light
laser
lesser
lasers
 shows put up for viewers to sit back, relax and enjoy.
This
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 is one of the few reasons foreigners from all over the world come to Singapore, and the catch: it is free to the public. To summarise,
although
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 the
internet
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 is useful in feeding us
information
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, without museums, our future generations might not know about the facts of our
history
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. It is undeniably a place that holds the
history
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 that leads us to our current situation and
too
being one more than one
two
, a preservation of our culture.
Thus
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, should not be taken away.

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