It has been suggested that all young adults should be required to undertake a period of unpaid work helping people in the community. Would the drawbacks of such a requirement be greater than the benefits to the community and the individual young adults?

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age, it is common to hear many charity

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are forming. Donating physically or through online are different ways

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can choose to give back to the society.

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, it is often debated that people believe charity

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should extend their help to

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others, regardless

of the place the less fortunate live. Whereas, others beg to differ, claiming that help offered to citizens of the

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should be placed

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before anything else. On the

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hand, financially helping ones own

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is vital to providing a better place for the needy.

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example is like the recent case that happened in Paris. The cathedral, Notre-Dame, broke out

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flames, resulting in many funds received from different charitable

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. Yes, it is undeniable that the United States of America (USA)

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were

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of them to contribute and provide aid. Undoubtedly, it is

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of the most developed countries in the world. Yet, it seems that while the government is generous, the

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still has a large number of homeless people. Living in slums is the solution for them to carry on with their daily

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lives

. In

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a situation, since the

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is well-off, shouldn’t they

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assign a priority to

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prioritize

their citizens? Henceforth, it is always said that

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of helping others,

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should help themselves

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.

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, help must not be restricted and ought to be made available for all. For an instance, the Yemen crisis that many

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have not heard

had not heard

of. The

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itself is unable to support themselves financially. The lack of food and

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health care

supplies are key issues faced in the

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. It is disheartening to see the citizens living in poverty, leading to malnourished children. Even so, having proper education is rare to

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see, unlike

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world countries

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as New Zealand.

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, with the assistance of

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from all over the

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world, extending

their hand to help these under

privilaged

blessed with privileges

privileged

, lives can be saved. To summarise,

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help should be given unconditionally, I strongly feel that the attention should

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focus

on the fellow countryman. With the

assisstance

the activity of contributing to the fulfillment of a need or furtherance of an effort or purpose

assistance

existence

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of

the

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, unfortunate people living in the

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will have access to daily necessities which the

privilaged

blessed with privileges

privileged

privilege

always take things for granted. The

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’s economy will

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grow and prosper to help others in need, creating a better environment. In turn with the funds gathered, countries will

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help each other in times of emergency.