Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing( for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras. In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Technology is a boon for mankind.In present time

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, masses are saying and doing

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up tracking and security cameras.In most of the cases, individuals being monitored are unaware

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happening; but I believe that there are various merits rather than demerits

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because with the advice of automation masses can do most of the thing from their home '

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as telecommuting, online study, online shopping and people can read the news about the world by their gadgets. But demerits

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and children are a misuse of their mobile

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with, these days masses are becoming a modern by

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of all nowadays most of the nation is facing the problem of corona pandemic so student did not do their study, but with the help of technology kids easily restart their study

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those are private employee they do their work from home with the help of telecommuting. So it is a beneficial thing for children as well as the worker.

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by mobile

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parents keep their

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they easily track the location of their kids

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Electronic gadgets have become a security man for every person.Apart from

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, in modern era masses have curiosity to wear new brand so they easily purchased clothes from online, because in online website they provide huge discount on on occasions On the hand

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every coin has a two faces on the same manner, there are few of disadvantage about

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why the level of cyber crime is increasing

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because few of people do the misuse of technology.

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but not the least

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or their kids but offspring do the misuse of their cell

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.They are always playing online games with their friends and do online chatting

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These types of activities harmful for kids because due to mobile

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children spoil their eye brightness

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they has become under the obese.

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every thing has a merit or demerits, but in

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situation advantages are outweigh than disadvantages. Nowadays cell contact is an essential thing for every person because with the help of automation masses are aware about society as well world, but when someone uses a mobile

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they spoil their colorblindness

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