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Some people think that they are responsible for their happines. Others feel that happiness depends on other factors in their life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays some people are so much stressed from their daily duties that they cannot feel the contentment. While some individuals believe that being happy is up to the people, others think that some
life
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 factors play crucial role in
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 area. In my opinion, people should have positive view and be able to feel happy. Some people argue that external and internal factors highly influence to feel the gladness. People probably have greater fulfilment when they possess a better
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 conditions. In fact, being wealthy, having good relationships with parents and loved ones, professional status and
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 to be in good health conditions are the key aspects of
life
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 for majority people to feel joy.
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, even though all factors mentioned above can increase the feeling of happiness, pessimist people might not consider themselves as a happy person in spite of owning very good facilities. The feeling of dissatisfaction from everything may damage the emotional state of the people. Those factors
can not
can not
cannot
 help the people to be happier if people suffer from depression and not emotionally healthy. In my opinion, to be happy people should be more optimistic and appreciate all the things around. Happiness does not much depend on the factors. Unless people are self-contented, they may just not realize how much
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happier
happiness
more happy
 they are indeed. I strongly
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believe
 that happiness will never come to the people who fail to appreciate the blessings which they have. In conclusion,
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 some factors
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 as affluence, health conditions or good relationships might
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influence the level
 of happiness, people can create their happy
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 being grateful for the thing the
own
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owner
owners
.
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