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Some people think that because some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree?

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In
this
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 contemporary setting, the technical subjects in academics like science and mathematics are considered essential for students,
however
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 many people argue that children should have the free hand in choosing subjects, so some subjects
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 as mathematics and philosophy should be optional
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 of compulsory. Among
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 controversy, I agree partly with it.
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, it is a fundamental right for every child to choose the subjects they like. It is
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 significantly for their
further
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 so that they can devote themselves to the studies that they loved. Needless to say that if someone could do
further
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 study in the subject that s/he interested in and good at, s/he will certainly achieve greater success.
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, subjects like maths and philosophy have effects on human lives. Maths can help us to be enthusiastic, and with a logical and numerate mind, and have an organised and methodical approach to practical tasks. Philosophy teaches children about moral values, reason, mind, and language. They not only stimulates thinking skills in children, but
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 improves their communication abilities, which are advantageous for students. I must say that education is a vital part of today’s human life.
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Therefore teachers
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Therefore, teachers
 need to use a tailored approach or an engaging method to teach these abilities to the children that everyone can understand easily and get them interested in the subject. I believe the British system is great, students can study a large mount of subjects at GCSE and be familiar with them,
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 they could choose the most suitable subjects in A level.
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, some subjects needed to be compulsory, at least before secondary school, because it is important for young people to gain various skills at that time.
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