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The world today is a safer place than it was a hundred years ago, and governments should stop spending large amounts of money on their armed forces. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The peace of the earth has always been a challenging dilemma in any areas which people struggle for it. In recent days, many people believe that the
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 is safer than the
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 century and the government should invest more economically in the armed force.
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 position It is undeniable that the
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 today is a much more peaceful place than ever before. The
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 War dates back nearly seventy years and, since 1945, no conflict have taken place in western countries.
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, people have suggested that spending
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 on necessities within society
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 of the armed forces is more useful. It seems to be impossible to spend less
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 on armed for of a country.
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 is very difficult, as even though no significant conflict has taken place in western countries, they are still involved in the conflicts of other countries. Allied to the fact that, the US contribution in the Iraqi war has only recently ended. For
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 involvement of military forces in foreign lands, countries still need to have strong armed forces, in case they are needed. There needs to be a huge amount of
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 to stabilize the social security with a lot of police officers and weapons as well as specialized equipment to protect the internal countries Not only military, but social security
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 to be invested in a huge amount of
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. In recent days, robbery and riots are increasingly raging, there need to be a huge budget invested in police to equip equipment as well as weapons to solve the situation. According to a recent survey, no sooner had
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 was used to remodel the police than the safety of the people is pushed to the highest level. In the final analysis, certain armed forces are necessary for major countries, even though the
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 is safer than a hundred years ago. They might need to intervene in conflicts in other countries and
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 peace is by no means assured for the future.
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