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Should governments make decisions about people’s lifestyle, or should people make their own decisions?

#governments #decisions #people’s #lifestyle #people
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There are states in which people can make their own decisions
such
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 as some developed countries and states where
government
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 makes decisions about people's lifestyles and that's the example of some of the dictatorial states. Personally, I believe that everyone should be free to make their own choices because it's something
that is
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 a part of your own life. So
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 the individual should do what he wants to do, but respecting the rights and the decisions of the others. When the decisions of some restrict the freedom of others, in
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 case the
government
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 should take action, by limiting
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 through laws.
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However sometimes
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However, sometimes
government
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 needs to make decisions about people's lifestyles that will surely limit some of the choices of an individual.
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, with the lockdown caused by the
coronavirus
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 that occurred
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 year,
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government
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the government
 had to decide for the lifestyle of everyone, in order to ensure a common safety. As I said before, in many countries, people don't even know what the freedom of choice is, and I'm talking about China or Korea or other countries where a simple lifestyle decision cannot be made. To um up,
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 to what I affirmed before, I think
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 deprivation of freedom of making decisions is the worst thing we can be deprived of.
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