Some people think that people are responsible for their happiness. Others feel that happiness depends on other factors in their life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People hold differing views how to achieve
happiness
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in
life
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. While some people believe that being happy bases on external factors, I,
however
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, side with people who feel that feeling happy depends on them. On the one hand, many people think that prosperity can be massively affected by surrounding factors. One feels happier when he is surrounded by people who support and motivate him.
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, generally, people are happier when they are with their friends and family because they feel more secure and content.
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, many individuals consider
financial well-being
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the financial well-being
as a source of enjoyment. They feel happy showing off their wealth to others.
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, materialistic things impart them a sense of satisfaction. While external factors can ensure materialistic
happiness
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, a poor can be happier than a rich in many cases with
positive mindset
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a positive mindset
. An honest and contented person can be a happy
person regardless
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person, regardless
of his economic status.
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, a number of extremely wealthy people in South Korea have committed suicide recently, apparently brought down by stress and other negative feelings. On the other aspect hand, the sense of
happiness
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is derived from one’s attitude to
life
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.
Life
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experience becomes very light when people understand that they cannot control all of what happens in their lives, but might conduct how to react.
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, he/she would not hang a level of
happiness
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on what goes on outside.
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, family relationship, personal aim and desire, and a peaceful mind are other important aspects of being happy in
life
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.
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, one research turns out that people who are more socially connected to family, to friends, to
community
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the community
, are happier, they are physically healthier and live longer than people who are less well connected. To sum up,
role
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the role
of external factors is indispensable for achieving
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happiness but
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happiness, but
many people consider themselves as happy by simply viewing
life
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from another perspective.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Self-reliance
  • Positive psychology
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Well-being
  • Mindset
  • Personal choices
  • Environmental factors
  • Interpersonal relationships
  • Emotional resilience
  • Quality of life
  • Subjective well-being
  • External circumstances
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