IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or that they find the most interest. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #teenagers #school #subjects #focus #interest
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Number of subjects learnt in school by teenagers has been a topic of debate. Some people are of the opinion that they should pay attention to all subjects in the school curriculum while others think that they should focus on the
subject
Use synonyms
 that they are good at. In my opinion, teenagers should have basic knowledge in all other
subjects but
Accept comma addition
subjects, but
 they should focus only on the
subject
Use synonyms
 that they can do it well for extra education to practice and to study their interest.
Firstly
Linking Words
, children would find it very interesting studying very few subjects that are very interesting to them, compared to when they would need to avoid the stress of understanding very difficult subjects. Take
for example
Linking Words
, a student who has a talent in drawing and develops interest in
arts
Suggestion
the arts
 should not take much time studying math when he could easily succeed in his chosen career.
Secondly
Linking Words
, Focusing on interesting subjects, youngsters are more active on it. They get more freedom and tension free atmosphere, which help them to bring out all potential and concentration to particular
subject
Use synonyms
 that facilitate their academic growth lead them to easily accomplish their dream In conclusion, it is more beneficial to learn one
subject
Use synonyms
 according to their interest because
this
Linking Words
 aspect brings more benefits to a pupil. When a student gives full attention to only one
subject
Use synonyms
, the learner can get high skill in the future and live a better life.
Moreover
Linking Words
, concentrating on one
Use synonyms
subject enhance
Accept comma addition
subject, enhance
 student’s efficiency of learning. Due to it, an individual’s stress of all school subjects has become lightened.
Submitted by Thunyanut Srichamara on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: