Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this.Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

The bar chart demonstrates the percentage of male and female in Australia divided into six different
age
groups, who did their physical
activity
regularly in 2010. Focusing on the graph, it is observed that the teenager was very punctual about their physical
activity
. 52.8% of boys and 47.7% of the girls did their regular physical exercise. Regarding to the
age
group
of 25 to 34, the ratio of Australian men was falling by 10%, but the figure of the women slightly rose at 48.9%. In
this
age
group
, more female did their regular exercise with compared to male.
Age
group
from 35 to 44, the percentage of men, who did their
activity
regularly, was again dropped in 39.5% and the percentage of women was surging and peaked at 52.5% in Australia.
However
, 43.1% of men whose aged was 45 to 54 did their regular
activity
. Whereas, 53.3% of women of
this
same aged
group
did
activity
Suggestion
the activity
an activity
. It was closely followed by 55 to 64 aged
group
women and the ratio of men was slightly rose at 45.1%.
On the other hand
, the proportion of elderly men and women was approximately same at 47%. Overall, it is evident that Australian female was very punctual about their regular
activity
than the male in most of the
age
groups.
However
, for the youth, boys did more physical
activity
than the girls in that period of time.
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