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Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this.Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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The bar chart demonstrates the percentage of male and female in Australia divided into six different
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 groups, who did their physical
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 regularly in 2010. Focusing on the graph, it is observed that the teenager was very punctual about their physical
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. 52.8% of boys and 47.7% of the girls did their regular physical exercise. Regarding to the
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 of 25 to 34, the ratio of Australian men was falling by 10%, but the figure of the women slightly rose at 48.9%. In
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, more female did their regular exercise with compared to male.
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 from 35 to 44, the percentage of men, who did their
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 regularly, was again dropped in 39.5% and the percentage of women was surging and peaked at 52.5% in Australia.
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, 43.1% of men whose aged was 45 to 54 did their regular
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. Whereas, 53.3% of women of
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 did
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. It was closely followed by 55 to 64 aged
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 women and the ratio of men was slightly rose at 45.1%.
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, the proportion of elderly men and women was approximately same at 47%. Overall, it is evident that Australian female was very punctual about their regular
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 than the male in most of the
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 groups.
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, for the youth, boys did more physical
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 than the girls in that period of time.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sports sponsorship
  • financial support
  • athletes
  • brand visibility
  • awareness
  • commercialization
  • integrity
  • dependencies
  • corporate funds
  • unethical practices
  • strategic partnerships
  • communal relations
  • promote healthy lifestyles
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