In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Fast
food
is feeding the majority percent of mankind in many countries. Higher
intake
of
this
type of unhealthy
food
embarks risk of diseases. To overcome
this
issue increase in tax payment
on
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for
fast
food
would helps
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would help
to divert people to
intake
healthy
food
. Before presenting my view, discussion on
pros
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the pros
and cons is necessary.
First
and foremost in
majority
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the majority
a majority
of developed countries spends extravagant
amount
of money for budget of Health care systems. As per
survey fifty
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survey, fifty
precent
give an exhibition of to an interested audience
present
percent
recent
amount
of
total budget
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the total budget
is dedicated
for
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to
the health department in most of the countries
aroung
in the area or vicinity
around
the globe.
Secondly
,
intake
of fast
food
is exponentially increasing because of
this
, with less exercise it leads to myriad numbers of illnesses. Why should upper authorities would pay for health care if people are not understanding the side effects of fast
food
! Research shows, the majority of illnesses are due to the adequate
amount
of
intake
of fast
food
.
As a result
,
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,
government
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the government
could increase the
amount
of tax which definitely reduce burden on economy to cure individuals.
However
, fast
food
is not just an option for some of the individual but it's
necessity
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a necessity
because of the lower income.
In addition
, fast
food
is cheaper compared to the healthy
food
,
such
as vegetables and fruits so without any
dought
the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about
thought
middle class would opt fast
food
as an alternative option. Going forward to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
the need, and for development of
industry government
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industry, government
subsides the foods,
such
as beef, and corn
instead
of healthy foods.
As a result
, prices of
healthy
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health
products which is more beneficial always stay expensive. One group of individuals never be able to have enough
amount
of money to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their families with nutritious
food
. After pondering merits and demerits, It can be concluded that, increase in tax would not dampen
this
issue
inspite
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in spite
of that it makes it worst for citizens of that country.
Best
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The best
possible solution is affordable
healty
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
food
products which automatically decrease interest of individuals in fast
food
. "Win win situation for governments as well as for people."
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