Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Indeed, there are many advantages to online shopping.
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example, there is no need to search for ages on the street or even fly to foreign countries to purchase the goods, and the comparison between different prices of the same good is easier.
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, I do not believe that the advantages of online shopping will outweigh the disadvantage. Below are the reasons:
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of all, the consumers have no way of knowing what exactly are they going to purchase.
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they are able to select the goods themselves, they cannot predict what kind of faults may the good possess.
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example, people buying a book online will not know what the book is about unless they have read it before, and it may turn out that they are not interested in it at all.
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addition, people buying furniture cannot closely examine the good, so they have no idea at all if the food they bought are really useful.
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, internet frauds are everywhere on the net, including online shopping. There is a high possibility that the sellers put one picture of a brand new good on the website, but send the buyers an older version of it, or, even worse, a couple of rocks or nothing at all. Unlike face to face shopping, it is often until the buyers get the goods when they realise that they are cheating, at which time the sellers have already disappeared with the money. Due to the reasons above, despite the many advantages of online shopping, I still don't believe that these can outweigh the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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