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Some People believe that Robots play an important role in future societies, While other argue that robots might have negative effects on societies give often. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In our
century how
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century, how
 technology
develop
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develops
, is a very debated topic who divides opinions.Some of us think that
this
 technology has a big impact over our life, while others think that there are some drawbacks in
this
.In my
opinion we
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opinion, we
 have to keep a balance
betwen
internal to, involving members of (a group of people)
between
 what is modern and
sistematic
characterized by order and planning
systematic
 and what is traditional
.
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.
 Nowadays, more and more
peolpe
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 become dependent
of
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on
 technology, children and adults have phones and others
gatgets
a device or control that is very useful for a particular job
gadgets
 in their home.
This
 is not a bad thing if we do not forget to spend time in free space and do not let that
this
divices
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device
devices
device's
divides
acaparate
work together on a common enterprise of project
cooperate
incorporate
 our time.Some parents use
this
 kind of device to entertain their children,
for example
 the scientists invented a robot called Alexa who is capable to tell stories to children or to interact
to
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with
 a person.I believe that a parent
can not be repace
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cannot replace
cannot be repace
cannot be replaced
cannot be replace
can not be replace
 by a robot and we have to look after
aur
of or belonging to us
our
your
 children and to try to spend time with them.Many children became addicted by
this
divices
an instrumentality invented for a particular purpose
device
 and that cam lead to some
disfunctions
(medicine) any disturbance in the functioning of an organ or body part or a disturbance in the functioning of a social group
dysfunctions
dysfunction
 in their behaviour.
On the other
hand we
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hand, we
 have to accept that our society is in continuous
develeopment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
developments
 and that robots have their place.
For
example in
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example, in
 medical area there are many robots who help medical
personal
group of people willing to obey orders
personnel
 in their job, we can use robots to in many areas in fabrics, kitchens.
Depsite
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Despite
 the related negative impacts
,
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,
I think that we can find positive effects in using robots in our
day
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daily
 life. Taking everything into consideration
,
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,
I believe that the positive effects of using Robots in our societies overweight the negative effects with one conditions to keep a balance and not let that
this
 kind of device to
acaparate
work together on a common enterprise of project
cooperate
recuperate
incorporate
 our real life.
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