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Some people think that life is better in cities, however others claim that village life is far better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many of us believe that the
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 can be better in a big metropolis
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while others find that country-side is more healthier.
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 is a topic that often divides opinions, but I believe that depends on what we expect from our
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 and what are our priorities. Nowadays, we live in a continuous development and more and more young people give village for a
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 in a big city. A good reason why people prefer
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 because
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 in cities can be more attractive and easier.
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, a young family with children have more options for their little baby to give them at a good school or kindergarten. Cities are very attractive for younger because having a night
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 who is very animated, big malls to do shoppings, many opportunities regarding jobs finding.
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 big cities have an airport for those who like to travel, has better medical services. Today there are many business people who prefer to buy a house in a countryside and to spend their free time there away from the cities.
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, cities become very crowded and polluted and many people prefer to go to village
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 even if
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 means to be more simple.At countryside the atmosphere is more clear, the
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 in general is healthier.
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, in our routine day when we wake up in the morning is better to hear a sound of animal
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 of machine sound. Taking everything into consideration, I sustain the view that
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 in the village is better and healthier, even if we do not have the same comfort that we find in cities.
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