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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. What are advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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The
places
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place
having
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has
 extreme weather
such
 as Antarctica and the Sahara Desert were mysterious before as it was hard to access there.
However
, with the advance of science, scientific researchers and travellers can go to the remote area to study and explore.
This
 achievement brings a new discovery
to
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in
 natural science,
however
, at the same time destroying the purity of natural beauty. With regards to the benefits of developing technology to travel to remote areas, it can break through the development of scientific and geological studies. The researchers can travel to the North Pole and the South Pole in person with the assistance of professional equipment. It is feasible to collect the valuable data for analysis to examine the landscape, biological diversity and climate there. The professionals can,
therefore
,
acknowledge more
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acknowledge, more
 understanding of the remote areas contributing to scientific achievements.
Nevertheless
, while the development of travelling to the remote areas, the natural habitats and creatures are disturbed, and the
environment
 is polluted by human activities. The scientists and tourists may leave behind their rubbish in the North
pole
a native or inhabitant of Poland
Pole
 that destruct the living
environment
 of Polar bear. Making a fire in the camp can emit carbon dioxide to intensify the melting of ice in Antarctica, The creatures living in the remote areas may be scared by the scientists and tourists.
Therefore
, the quietness and purity of these mysterious areas may be destroyed by the curiosity of human. Scientific development is ever advancing that bringing convenience, knowledge of different places around the world to our society.
However
, scientists and tourists cannot be selfish to disturb the original living
environment
 for the animals living in a remote natural
environment
.
Instead
, they should reduce to the minimum interruption when they travel to places in extreme weather.
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