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“Libraries are irrelevant in the age of the internet and should not be publicly funded.” Do you agree or disagree?

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Libraries are important cornerstones for a healthy society. Some school of people believe due to the rising era of
internet
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, libraries do not hold its value
any more
at the present or from now on; usually used with a negative
anymore
. Not only
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, but they are
also
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 of opinion that funds should not be granted for
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 noble cause which spreads free knowledge. I disagree with the above mentioned thoughts.
This
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 essay will discuss the significance of libraries in today's generation of
internet
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 and why its public funding necessary? The experience of reading physical books is incomparable. The essence of getting lost
into
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in
 the
world
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 of stories uplifts
heart
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the heart
 and the soul. Many people are habitual of reading various magazines and books in the libraries, as reading online does not create
divine atmosphere
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a divine atmosphere
 which one can get being surrounded by the books. In countries where local gathering is not so common. Places like libraries give humans chance to meet like minded personalities and discuss on various topics. The
world
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 wide web has brought the entire
world
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 on a finger tip. It is a humongous source of information wherein; one can get all sorts of data just by few clicks.
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, everyone is not fortunate enough to afford it. Though, it might be conveniently available in cities, but still there are few places which could not afford
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 leisure. Remote areas in developing countries like India, Africa, Bhutan
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
, wherein people barely get electric supply, thinking of
internet
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 service
is
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are
 unimaginable. People could hardly afford two meals a day, in
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 situation purchasing
internet
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 plans
is
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are
 out of
question
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the question
.
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 free funded libraries are the only source of knowledge to prosper
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 underprivileged communities. To conclude, free funded libraries not only play a vital role in shaping the life of
unfortunates but
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unfortunates, but
also
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 give the essence of sinking
in
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into
 the
world
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 of books to attain immense pleasure and knowledge.
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Therefore I
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Therefore, I
 strongly believe that libraries must be publicly funded.
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