Nowadays many people now have the freedom to work an live anywhere because of advances in communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Indeed, tremendous changes

has been brought

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have been brought

by technical appliances at every facet of life globally. Irrefutably computers and mobile phones

has made

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have made

life easier. Due to it, most of

workers

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the workers

doing office

work

home

. According to me by doing

work

from

home

have more fruitful effects rather than drawbacks. My

further

notion about

above given statement

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the above given statement

as follows:

Initially

, an ample of fruitful results behind

this

phenomenon. The prime one is,

time

saving by

this

approach. Because when workers travel

everyday

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everyday, then

then

they consume

lot

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a lot

time

and traffic jam is

big problem

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a big problem

the big problem

while

traveling

the act of going from one place to another

travelling

Such

as, nowadays, everyone

use

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uses

their own vehicle due to it, traffic and pollution increase day by day. Whereas, if they do

work

home

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a home

homes

the home

they can solve

this

problem.

Secondly

, in the modern era, women

also

do part

time

and full

time

job by which they

do not do take

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do not take

don't take

aren't taken

aren't taking

are not taking

are not taken

have not taken

care of

children but

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children, but

if they spend

their quality of

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their quality time

time

with their family members. Admittedly, 'as every coin has two sides' so behind

this

phenomenon have

some

one or some or every or all without specification

any

adverse effects on human life.

First

of all, by

doing

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will work remotely communication among employees get

getting work remotely communication among employees

has work remotely communication among employees gotten

has work remotely communication among employees got

is work remotely communication among employees getting

was work remotely communication among employees getting

doing work remotely communication among employees get

work

remotely communication among employees get reduce because when employees go office daily they meet different people by which they learn many things from them but it is not possible when they do

work

home

Moreover

, due to it, they become more lazy and unhealthy.

As a

result they

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result, they

can face many health problems. In conclusion,

although

by doing

work

home

employees face many problems but its positive effect cannot

neglected

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neglect

by humans.

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Nowadays many people now have the freedom to work an live anywhere because of advances in communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

The internet has made knowledge immediately available through computers and smartphones all over the world. Much of the information is free. Discuss the both advantages and drawbacks of this trend.

Some people believe that a good teamwork makes companies successful. Others say that it is more important for companies to have good leaders. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently.To what extent do you agree or disagree?