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Human activities is damaging the Earth or making it a better place to live? Do you agree or disagree?

#activities #earth #place
It is undeniable the
significant
Suggestion
signing
significance
sign
 of The Earth because it is the only place we live in. People have different views about whether or not our planet is being destroyed by our increasing behaviours or human efforts are contributing to a worth-living destination. Personally, I believed that both criteria should be given equal consideration.
To begin
 with, humans are responsible for a variety of environmental problems, pollution
in particular
. To put it another way, gas emission from factories and exhaust vehicles lead to global warming, which may have a devastating effect on the Earth in the future.
Besides
, the more population, the more consumptions, which contaminate the environment.
This
 is exemplified by the fact that a numerous plastic people consume
are threatening
Suggestion
is threatening
 the clean water resources
such
 as rivers and oceans.
By contrast
, thanks for people attempting, a wonderful world is being created to help us improving our living condition.
That is
, modernization provides us more skyscrapers, entertainment and transportations, which raise
human current standard
Suggestion
human current standards
the human current standard
. As an illustration, our lives are more convenient than that in 50 years ago with cars, plane and smart phones.
Moreover
, scientist
progresses help
Accept comma addition
progresses, help
 to protect and preserve some animals
endanging
pose a threat to; present a danger to
endangering
 by climate change as polar bears. It is the fact that people concern more about
environmental problem
Suggestion
environmental problems
an environmental problem
 nowadays and have more measures to
safe
save from ruin, destruction, or harm
save
 the Earth by planning trees, recycling. To recapitulate,
although
 having pollution for global living, social development
also
 affect positive for our living habitat including convenience and prevention useful animals. As long as we concern about
changing climate
Suggestion
the changing climate
 and its impacts, we will handle it effectively.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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