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Many people work long hours leaving very little time for leisure activities does the situation have more advantages or disadvantages?

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I believe that a balanced daily routine between
leisure
 activities and the other.But these days due to abundant duties, people work long hours without any
free
Suggestion
time to break free
time
 to break. Maybe a few advantages can be found in work a lot leaving
leisure
time but
Accept comma addition
time, but
 in my point of view, it is very optimistic attitude that many successful people in the works are a workaholic! But is the fact that there is a strong relation between hard working and being professional in all fields.
Although
 it depends on that choose from them.
On the other hand
, if
this
 situation is an individual decision to improve self-skills and activities there are no any difficulties for
this
 person, even as they enjoy it. So can ignore the disadvantages of just working. I think, Lack of
leisure
time
 has many drawbacks to people even the group who choose
this
 status. But the main disadvantages like anxiety, depression, exhausted, less efficiency, addiction and so on, is too possible to the people that under the pressure of their employer or other factors. Maybe in the short period not recognized these drawbacks, but it is very clear that in long term situations observed all of the items. In conclusion, for prevention of the disadvantages of
this
 subject involved, boost the efficiency at work or other duties, help the mentality healthy in society, improve the relationship in families and reduce the social damages it is so necessary to be a rules to support the people for balanced their life that have enough
leisure
time
 during the week.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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