write an narrative paragraph about a challenge/ experience that you have faced

The most interesting experience of my vacation was when I visited my friend's hometown
last
year. The
first
thing we did when we came was
went
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going
to the beach
in
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during
the sunny day. It was so amazing,
this
was the biggest beach that I had ever seen. White clouds and clear
wave attracted
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wave, attracted
to us.. After that, I started swimming, the water was so great. Everything was getting bad while I was swimming, my foot was very hurt. At that time, my mind was so scared, I tried to scream under the water but I could not.
Then
, I could not breath, I thought I was going to die if my friend did not save me from the panic. All problems were gone, I was being scared of the water. It was an unforgetable
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memory
in my life. I hope everyone should be careful when swim and not to swim alone because it is so dangerous.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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