These days in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A decade ago, people tend to choose teaching as
occupation
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an occupation
,
however now
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however, now
this
trend is dramatically decreasing in many countries.
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In
this
paragraph, we will discuss both the drawbacks and their respective solution.
first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
of all, the wages of a
teacher
are far less than expected
for instance
a lawyer in the UK earns 5 times more as compared to the
salary
of the
teacher
having the same experience.
in
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In
order to cope with
this
problem
the
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The
government should increase the
salary
of the instructor significantly.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
the
teacher
can earn their well-being. Moving on.
the
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The
next
critical obstacle is that the working-hours for the school
teacher
are pretty high. More-ever the
teacher
has to check papers and assignments.
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On
the flip
side they
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side, they
are not able to spend their quality time with their family
.
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.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
to address
this
problem, the Government must hire more staff in secondary school so the workload is distributed among the staff.
Finally
, the
last
issue is the behaviour of the students towards the
teacher
, some of the pupils did not behave well in class which frustrate the teachers of a
high-school
a public secondary school usually including grades 9 through 12
highschool
,
as a result
, they decided to quit their jobs.
the
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The
solution of
this
obstacle is that the parent should teach their kids how to respect their instructors as well as teach manner because the
teacher
is a key to the development of a society.
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In
a conclusion
.
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.
there
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There
and many critical issues
such
as
salary
,
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,
working-hours
kids
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kids'
behaviour.
the
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The
possible solutions to these problems are to increase the
salary
, limit the work-hours and change in the attitudes of kids.
the
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The
governments and parents are responsible to cope out from these issues.
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