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Countries should restrict foreign companies from opening offices and factories in order to protect local businesses. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons and specific examples to explain your answer

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The Government of the nation should take paramount steps to protect their local businesses; and these are occasionally registered in form of blockage of the foreign investments. I utterly agree with
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 initiative and
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 essay will provide facts to support my side.
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 and foremost, in exposing the domestic trade to a greater platform, a measure to restrict international companies is predominant. Working under the foreign employers has
lead
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led
 to an area of comfort in local employees;
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 is resulting in diminishing the creativity within local employers and snatching the chance to flourish on an international scale.
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, the patriotic feeling within the citizens, to put their effort
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in
 the country on a global platform, looses all motivation, as
their
people in general
they
 sweat goes in vain for not being recognized by their motherland.
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, the Indian government has enacted, Made in India moment, which focuses on producing every good and produce within a country to reward the economy.
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, the profit earned by international companies reduces the GDP of the nation and supports foreign country to increase their financial capabilities. These capabilities could
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 be indulged in buying arms and tanks, bombs, etc.
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To
 attack and get control of a region, stimulating the rise to the self deterioration of a territory.
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, there are factors like foreign exposure for a petty percentage of workers, a remunerative relationship with other countries and a variety of merchandise, that pulls the authority down in favouring international trade. But, to summarize, it is evident from the discussion and facts that confining
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 investments is progressive.
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