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Nowadays, there are more workers working from home and more students studying from home, due to the fact that that computer technology is more and more easily accessible and cheaper. Do you think it is a positive or negative trend?

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In today’s time there are more employees working from
home
 and more children studying from
home
, the reason is that
computer
technology
 is easily available and more affordable. I think
that is
 a negative trend.
To begin
 with the trend of working and learning from
home
 is beneficial below are the two main reasons for it.
Firstly
 due the latest
technology
 and its affordability everything can be easily available
For example
 due to latest pandemic of Covid-19 many of companies have opted to let their employees to work from
home
this
 wouldn’t be possible if the
computer
technology
 was not there and even due internet availability and reach lot of students are able to talk there teachers and even the lectures are able to share their knowledge, to their students.
Secondly due
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Secondly, due
 to
technology
 easily available to employees the companies spend on the campus and travel expense have been cut-down.
However
, there are many benefits of
computer
technology there
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technology, there
 are many disadvantages to
this
also
. As you see that in recent times due to the
technology
 and internet many of students have less physical activity and they tend to spend most of time in front of their
computer
 screens due which there is more strain on eyes and eyesight may become weak.
Secondly work
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Secondly, work
 from
home
 situation many of employees spend most of time sitting at
home
. Due which they may face some other health issues. To conclude with the advantages and disadvantages of
computer
technology
 I think that disadvantage will have
double impact
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a double impact
 on the residents. Because if the automation makes resident life simple more it makes them lazy and inactive due which there would be
lot
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lots
 of problems and stress.
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