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In many countries women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household works. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In our modern life, more and more women and men are working full time.
Consequently
, some people supposed that reasonable for women and men have the same amount of household work, In my opinion, I completely agree that household chores should be shared by them. The
first
 reason is that equitable sharing of housework between husband and wife helps women reduce task pressure not only at job but
also
 at home, for their roles in modern society have changed tremendously over the years. Women still undertake full-time jobs like men and they always try to fulfil their assigned tasks, so it is necessary to have the share of men to reduce the burden and pressure for women. When the household chores are shared with men
such
 as taking care of their children, cleaning the house or cooking and some things like that, women will have time for chilling out and entertainment because they deserve a proper rest after a hard-working day as men.
Therefore
, women can spend time with children if they receive help from men.
In addition
, splitting family tasks can create a successful gender equality, environment with an emphasis on mutual support and respect.
For example
, if the job is given equally between the parents, the efficiency of working in the home is better and make children understand that no one is exempt from family duties.
Besides
, sharing housework is a way to show our love and care for our dear family.
This
 will help family affection become strong, sociable and close. It can be expressed through simple acts of interest like washing dishes after meals
instead
 of wives. Men will gradually understand the value of a job if they help women in housework.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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